– Review of draft 2 of the final report
I have uploaded two drafts of the final reports. Now I need to give them some feedback (Contextual Comments and Final Comments). 

– Responses (Revision): Do you find similarities in your revision strategies with those of your group members? Do you find new ideas for revision in their answers that you would like to try? Respond to at least 2 people. 

I have uploaded a total of 4 posting, and you can choose 2 of them and respond. This one has no word counts. Maybe about 100-120 words each.Classmate #5’s Writing

I have uploaded the writing as a file.

Contextual Comments
Write two 100-word comments telling the writer where they should focus the most as they revise and how they can strengthen that part of the final report.

Final Comments
Using our rubric for reports, tell the writer what category of the rubric is the strongest in this report and which category needs the most attention and revision. For both, explain why. At least 100 words. 
Here’ the link to our rubric, but it might be easier to have it open in another window. Find our rubric on our Canvas homepage.

Classmate #4’s Writing

I have uploaded the writing as a file.

Contextual Comments
Write two 100-word comments telling the writer where they should focus the most as they revise and how they can strengthen that part of the final report.

Final Comments
Using our rubric for reports, tell the writer what category of the rubric is the strongest in this report and which category needs the most attention and revision. For both, explain why. At least 100 words. 
Here’ the link to our rubric, but it might be easier to have it open in another window. Find our rubric on our Canvas homepage.Peer 1

· The revision process is for developing writing rather than correcting
· Local changes include improving the style of the writing
· Global changes include audience adjustments or changes to focus; these affect the paper as a whole
· Decide how much revision effort your writing level needs
· Make few local, immediate changes during the first draft. Then make important changes first!
· First revision: Focus on content and organization
· Make sure your paper’s focus is manageable
· Ensure you are meeting the purpose (ex. all the components of an assignment)
· Revise for commitment, audience, and proportion
· Second revision: Condensing our writing and improving our readability 
· Does it need more examples?
· Third revision: Focus on style, using active verbs, better word choices, stronger transitions, and more concrete language.
· Avoid using “is + adjective or noun patterns.”
· Cut prepositional phrases
 
This reading offers many helpful strategies for us as developing professional writers. Surprisingly, one of the most useful strategies for me would be to avoid making local stylistic changes during the first draft. I often get bogged down by questions of word choice and sentence structure when the first few drafts should be focused mainly on content and organization. Some other useful strategies for me including revising for purpose and ensuring that all of the content in my drafts match up with the central topic of the paper. I sometimes go off-topic when writing about subjects I’m interested in, and revising for purpose can help me keep my commitments to the audience. I also need to be careful revising to improve conciseness and concreteness in my writing style. It is hard cutting out what I have written, but following the previous advice will hopefully make it easier to see the revision process as essential to the final product. 

Peer 2

· …Final Report Prompt

Task

For this class, you will pick a topic that interest you, conduct research on it, and focus on a problem within this general topic that you would like to see solved. You will produce a professional report addressed to the audience who can fix the problem, or at least get the process started in having the problem addressed. Your report should end with recommendations to fix the problem or at least to start addressing the problem.
Word count: 1200-1300 words

Important things to keep in mind: 
· The project will be researched-based (Research will be at least 6 sources, 3 of which must be reports on your topic). You can also include primary research, depending on your topic, but you don’t have to.
· The project will have multiple steps (Proposal Memo, Annotated Bibliography, Progress Report Memo). 
· Your final report should include: an executive summary, the body of the report, and recommendations.
· Your report should follow the typical format for reports with recommendations. Your final report will incorporate the research you summarized in the annotated bibliography. Of course, you will not have an annotated bibliography in the final report, but you will synthesize the information from those sources in order to help support your report.
· You need to create at least one visual for your report.

Getting started: 
To get started, start with a topic that interest you; then, narrow down your focus on an issue within that topic. Use your research to find a problem that needs solving and come up with recommendations.Rubric for the Final Report

FOCUS

· The writer has a purpose for writing the report, a clear problem description, and argument.
· Only include significant and relevant facts/information, but make sure to have a complete background introduction to show the author’s understanding of the issue. 
· The objective of the report must be defined and clear, and the report should stay focused on the main objective.
· Provide a concise but clear explanation of the motivation and/or background of a real-world problem.
· Provide a reasoned argument in favor of specific recommendations.

STRUCTURE/ORGANIZATION

· Structure material in a logical, coherent order. The structure is suitable for the topic.
· Subheadings lead the audience so that it doesn’t get lost or confused.
· The introduction provides a clear background information and purpose of the research.
· Conclusion: the report has a conclusion so that will ensure that the purpose of the report is clear and accomplished. 
· Executive summary: The summary has the main points and solutions of the report. It allows the reader to know the report’s main idea and recommendations.

AUDIENCE

· A report should have a target audience to which the report is directed to. 
· The whole report and its recommendations address the audience’s needs, knowledge, and attitude towards the issue. This will help structure the report effectively.
· The report has an effective tone for its intended audience.
· The report needs well-evaluated recommendations to call the intended audience for actions.

RESEARCH

· The findings and analysis of findings is one of the most important parts of the report and they lead to the recommendations.
· The data of the report includes all of the information that the author has collected that is relevant to the topic or purpose. This could also include images, survey results, etc.
· …